tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8973096.post5419838181176927731..comments2023-06-24T05:22:49.574-07:00Comments on SBFH: allrighty thenPsycho Kittyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05633634991906191853noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8973096.post-17542124938063544442008-05-17T22:13:00.000-07:002008-05-17T22:13:00.000-07:00I would cut the final line. There's also a line th...I would cut the final line. There's also a line that got repeated somehow, and I would remove one instance of it. And I would cut the words "I'm saved."<BR/><BR/>Yuck, I just even hate writing about this piece now. It isn't that I hate it, I just like it a lot less than I liked it when I submitted it. So maybe it's good that I was a bit impulsive, because if I was staring at the thing now, I'd probably never send it out.Psycho Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05633634991906191853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8973096.post-83292898396612203352008-05-15T17:22:00.000-07:002008-05-15T17:22:00.000-07:00I'm curious to know which two lines and two words...I'm curious to know which two lines and two words you wish you'd cut. I liked it as it is, though I felt a little dim redoing the chronology and making sense out of things.Orangehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12433254398377357737noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8973096.post-34320606523345186082008-05-15T08:19:00.000-07:002008-05-15T08:19:00.000-07:00Congrats to you both...wonderful writing.Congrats to you both...wonderful writing.Jessicahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11464465779161315273noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8973096.post-34349891009149361792008-05-15T07:07:00.000-07:002008-05-15T07:07:00.000-07:00Gorgeous!! Really, PK, well done.Gorgeous!! Really, PK, well done.Kylahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03311014761113076785noreply@blogger.com